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OP - February 04, 2013, 03:24 AM

Hi guys, ok finally did Muna's story and she's an ex-Muslim in my Joseph and Yusra comic. And I finally did her story about events that lead her to be fed up with Islam and leave. Before I print it would be awesome if you guys could read it briefly and give me some feedback ^_^
It's only 24 pages long.

---> http://www.sakura02.net/munastory.html

Please don't leak it ;___; it's top secret going to published soon, that's how make scraps of money. Thanks.

If I had some time I really want to do a comic of one of you guy's apostasy stories, but UGG no time ;___; one day I promise.

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Reply #1 - February 04, 2013, 06:54 AM

Umm, if you don't want it leaked, why are you putting the link to it on a public web page?

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Reply #2 - February 04, 2013, 02:09 PM

because I trust you guys ^_^; I'm removing the link soon. So please ;___;

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Reply #3 - February 04, 2013, 03:19 PM

That was just beautiful <3
I loved it soo much.

Ok, what should I comment on...

It was touching, I felt really close to the characters. The 9/11 thing, that was really clever and triggered a lot of thoughts about that, context, etc..I love how you wrote "love" when she wasn't afraid to fall in love, made me smile..oh god, it got really sad

Btw, In the scene with all the Muslims nagging, it says "I don't Yusra playing with my kids"

Then the new boyfriend scene "I saw someone who was trying to bring out of the darkness"

How many other stories did you write? I'd love to read the ready ones!
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Reply #4 - February 04, 2013, 03:43 PM

That was really well done. You're a very talented artist. It didn't quite end though, didn't really feel like an ending to me, but I suppose it signifies that that many people have not yet 'come out' to their families/children. I feel for the girl in the story (Muna). I would love to see other stories you've created.
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Reply #5 - February 04, 2013, 04:32 PM

Thanks for the feedback. Yeah I need to fix those typos.. ^^
Well Muna's story is a part of my larger story Joseph and Yusra, and I'm making issues that are extra side stories that go in between events, so that's why it trails off.
Thanks so much for the feedback guys!

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Reply #6 - February 05, 2013, 01:24 AM

Very sweet and sad. The manga looks professional. I respect the eye and craftsmanship it takes to plan and set out storyboards. It's harder than it looks.

Too fucking busy, and vice versa.
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Reply #7 - February 05, 2013, 01:31 AM

Incredible talent you have.

If you ever have some moments to spare, maybe you could rustle up a couple of manga cells for us to use as memes to promote the forum and twitter account <--------cheeky, charming, asking grin

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Reply #8 - February 05, 2013, 01:36 AM

Thanks Ishina

I'm glad my comic is told in such a way in which is is really convincing. Not a true story entirely fiction. For I am not an ex-Muslim (nor have I had really any experience with Muslims in my life) BUT I was so inspired by reading through nearly every apostasy story here on CEMB that I just took re-occurring themes and compiled it into Muna's backstory.

This is kind of testing the waters. ONE DAY (when I'm not swamped with other comic projects ;__;) I want to take someone's story here on CEMB and do something like what I did with Muna's story. And do something of an ex-Muslim true story series.

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Reply #9 - February 05, 2013, 01:52 AM

Wow

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Reply #10 - February 05, 2013, 05:08 AM

I think you need to redraw the whole thing.

J/K, it's a really well presented story. 10/10.

Grammar error on the page where she gets the call about the missile attack, it should be "Is this how my prayer was answered?" instead of "pray was answered".

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