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  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #90 - October 10, 2013, 03:34 AM

    Nah, you need the rhyme. Part of the charm.

    `But I don't want to go among mad people,' Alice remarked.
     `Oh, you can't help that,' said the Cat: `we're all mad here. I'm mad.  You're mad.'
     `How do you know I'm mad?' said Alice.
     `You must be,' said the Cat, `or you wouldn't have come here.'
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #91 - October 10, 2013, 03:42 AM

    You ain't a Londoner, geezer.
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #92 - October 10, 2013, 03:46 AM

    Nope, Robin Hood country.

    Me duck. Cool

    `But I don't want to go among mad people,' Alice remarked.
     `Oh, you can't help that,' said the Cat: `we're all mad here. I'm mad.  You're mad.'
     `How do you know I'm mad?' said Alice.
     `You must be,' said the Cat, `or you wouldn't have come here.'
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #93 - October 10, 2013, 03:50 AM

    Cockney slang was created in prisons so that the guards and authorities wouldn't have a clue what they were on about. It was a way to speak freely and spread once they got out of prison.


    That makes sense.

    Don't let Hitler have the street.
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #94 - October 10, 2013, 03:51 AM

    As for my Londoner credentials...

  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #95 - October 10, 2013, 03:52 AM

    It's retarded code poetry, always innovating, the better to keep the uninitiated off balance.

    Trouble and strife = wife.

    You've got to love it, especially as it is often shortened so as not actually to rhyme. Thus a wig is simply a syrup.


    Nice.

    Don't let Hitler have the street.
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #96 - October 10, 2013, 03:23 PM

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BcP9EgM8rXM

    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #97 - October 10, 2013, 03:44 PM

    Now two of them are out of bed and wrestling, asking me to referee. I log off.


    I laughed loud and long at this, you know the giggles. 3 you intrigue me, you give flashes of anger, a deep and dark backstory, self-deprecation, astuteness, sense of humour but you let on in bits and bats, remaining an enigma of sorts, love the email address, please tell me you thought of that yesterday and not one previously held.

    I guess you have three kids. Where is Dad? I am not campaigning for the vacant position but feel that I would always have been better at raising other peoples kids rather than my own. I feel sorry for my own kid. She has my genes. Lol

    Anyways I have sent you the script, not looked at myself for five years, my own take - perhaps it is too slow for a movie more a two hour drama, my characters and plot are good (cept the strong female presence) my dialogue is ok. Constructive criticism please and please don't rip my heart out publically.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KBIdcUxdgo0

    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #98 - October 10, 2013, 09:30 PM

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    a deep and dark backstory


    Well maybe not deep and dark, perhaps it started out well, very exotic but to no avail. It does not matter if that made no sense to you, it is sorta not mean to, or is it to be explained later?...

    Anyways, the film/screenwriting  rule book lol says that there are, not sure I remember, 7, 9 genres of movie. I.e all stories can fit into 7/9 categories, perhaps some subsections, but overall that is your lot.

    So why not life - how many different types of lives can there be? Sure, you might variations on a theme dependent on many factors but generally I don't think there can be that many, a happy life, a sad life, a life for someone else etc tec

    Even the looks of people - take Eurasians because that is the group I am most familiar with, well if you take the best looking people with completely different facial structures, say females (because that is the group I am most familiar with in terms of looking) how many would there be? Ten, at most, same for dudes

    and everyone else will sorta fall in line behind them, being a little less beautiful each time.

    7/9 genres of movies, 10 different looks, perhaps 8 different types of lives, 6 degrees of sepeartion, every fifth person is Chinese, 4 calling birds, 3 French hens, 2 turtle doves and a partridge in the pear tree. How is that for first mention of Christmas. Christmas makes me all melancholy.

    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #99 - October 11, 2013, 02:46 AM

    I laughed loud and long at this, you know the giggles. 3 you intrigue me, you give flashes of anger, a deep and dark backstory, self-deprecation, astuteness, sense of humour but you let on in bits and bats, remaining an enigma of sorts, love the email address, please tell me you thought of that yesterday and not one previously held.

    I guess you have three kids. Where is Dad? I am not campaigning for the vacant position but feel that I would always have been better at raising other peoples kids rather than my own. I feel sorry for my own kid. She has my genes. Lol

    Anyways I have sent you the script, not looked at myself for five years, my own take - perhaps it is too slow for a movie more a two hour drama, my characters and plot are good (cept the strong female presence) my dialogue is ok. Constructive criticism please and please don't rip my heart out publically.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KBIdcUxdgo0


    I made the email yesterday, in the hopes that the heavens would rain unpublished literature down upon me, and I would have a million more reasons to use it.
    I would probably be better at raising someone else's kid's too. I expect too much from mine, but school conference did go well today. My oldest is doing much better than before. I might not be messing them up too badly. I feel sorry for my kids, too, about my genes. But guilt really messes up effective parenting techniques. I don't want to spoon feed my twelve year old like a Turkish mother, and have him think he is the Shah. So I try to let it go.
    If there were a just God, their father would be in hell. Since there is not, he is just far away enough so that I can sleep a few hours at a time at night. Most nights. With a butter knife in the door jamb. Or two butter knives. 
    I like the plot so far. I am on break. The music changed and it didn't fit, so I came to see what the fuss might be. I can't find one, though. Some videos are restricted to me because of local copyright laws. I couldn't see Kelis and I am too lazy to watch something besides Bounce with her in it. Because I love Bounce.
    Back to plot.

    Don't let Hitler have the street.
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #100 - October 11, 2013, 02:49 AM

    Well maybe not deep and dark, perhaps it started out well, very exotic but to no avail. It does not matter if that made no sense to you, it is sorta not mean to, or is it to be explained later?...

    Anyways, the film/screenwriting  rule book lol says that there are, not sure I remember, 7, 9 genres of movie. I.e all stories can fit into 7/9 categories, perhaps some subsections, but overall that is your lot.

    So why not life - how many different types of lives can there be? Sure, you might variations on a theme dependent on many factors but generally I don't think there can be that many, a happy life, a sad life, a life for someone else etc tec

    Even the looks of people - take Eurasians because that is the group I am most familiar with, well if you take the best looking people with completely different facial structures, say females (because that is the group I am most familiar with in terms of looking) how many would there be? Ten, at most, same for dudes

    and everyone else will sorta fall in line behind them, being a little less beautiful each time.

    7/9 genres of movies, 10 different looks, perhaps 8 different types of lives, 6 degrees of sepeartion, every fifth person is Chinese, 4 calling birds, 3 French hens, 2 turtle doves and a partridge in the pear tree. How is that for first mention of Christmas. Christmas makes me all melancholy.


    I bet there is some sort of study on facial structure that lays this all out. I don't think the structure would be what is attractive, though, unless you had a favorite type. I read somewhere it is actually symmetry that ends up defining beauty.
    Christmas made me melancholy when I was Muslim. Now with all these present-mad children, it makes me a bit hyper.

    Don't let Hitler have the street.
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #101 - October 11, 2013, 06:44 PM

    I bet there is some sort of study on facial structure that lays this all out. I don't think the structure would be what is attractive, though, unless you had a favorite type. I read somewhere it is actually symmetry that ends up defining beauty.
    Christmas made me melancholy when I was Muslim. Now with all these present-mad children, it makes me a bit hyper.


    I am familiar with facial symmetry but that is not the whole story, I think. I mean if Quozimodo got half his face and replicated the L and R forms he would still probably be ugly. I once saw an article the Daily mail, did exactly that and took famous faces, it did not improve their looks.

    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #102 - October 11, 2013, 06:58 PM

    I made the email yesterday, in the hopes that the heavens would rain unpublished literature down upon me, and I would have a million more reasons to use it.
    I would probably be better at raising someone else's kid's too. I expect too much from mine, but school conference did go well today. My oldest is doing much better than before. I might not be messing them up too badly. I feel sorry for my kids, too, about my genes. But guilt really messes up effective parenting techniques. I don't want to spoon feed my twelve year old like a Turkish mother, and have him think he is the Shah. So I try to let it go.
    If there were a just God, their father would be in hell. Since there is not, he is just far away enough so that I can sleep a few hours at a time at night. Most nights. With a butter knife in the door jamb. Or two butter knives.  
    I like the plot so far. I am on break. The music changed and it didn't fit, so I came to see what the fuss might be. I can't find one, though. Some videos are restricted to me because of local copyright laws. I couldn't see Kelis and I am too lazy to watch something besides Bounce with her in it. Because I love Bounce.
    Back to plot.


    3

    Yes regarding your email address and I laugh reading your explanation above about it but the play on words, you meant that, yeah?  As the verb you used is sometimes associated with islam/Allah? yes

    So the only thing deep and dark was his eyes. Turkish? Turkish or a Turk? There is a world of difference. My thoughts were it was going to be one of the three, Moroccan, Egyptian or Turk/Turkish. At least you are not bitter and twisted about it. I would explain a lot more, have to put my football head on. But if an English girl did the dirty over me,   :'(would I blame the culture she was bought up in? Though like my number female poster (joint with tigress, so far)told me  --- islam is maleness gone nuclear also very similar to my friend I mentioned here recently with estranged Turk husband, he phoned her and said he was coming back, she slept with a knife too.  mysmilie_977

    Raising kids? I will swop you my sulky teenager for three? of yours. kriss kross.  :)She would love America. What swamps do you live near. Not only has she my genetics, she does not have my mother as her mother. No matter how much you fight it, you will wake up one day and become your parents  finmad. She has my rebel streak, it does not matter, she will be always anti-establishment. I think her school teachers lie at parents evening, at scholl she is presentable, speaks when spoken to, shy, no trouble, hard-working and I think well at home she is a fucking terror, bette this way round, will watch out when that flips. When you say your genetics in your kids, you mean his really?

    I will watch Bounce. Please when reading my script take note of five graded comedy moments. (you didn't think you would just be reading it Wink

    1. A smile in the head 'that was clever/witty'
    2. Physical one-syllable chuckle
    3. lengthier version.
    4. out loud
    5. pissing yourself

    You might not get to or want to get to number 5. But in a movie other people laughing can help you laugh. And a movie/drama should have a lot of 1's a few 2/3/4 and hopefully a couple of fives. And I hope when you get to the end, you take note of the technical aspects of the script. By that I mean, read carefully, it would be good if you spot holes.  Afro

    Anyways football beckons, may bump into you tonight, if not cya soon.  cool2

    ETA - I realise that the addition of emoticons maybe incongruous when you have been talking about having knives to protect yourself and your kids. Please excuse my lack of tact. I did not intend to mock/belittle your experiences.
     

    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #103 - October 12, 2013, 01:06 AM

    3

    Yes regarding your email address and I laugh reading your explanation above about it but the play on words, you meant that, yeah?  As the verb you used is sometimes associated with islam/Allah? yes

    So the only thing deep and dark was his eyes. Turkish? Turkish or a Turk? There is a world of difference. My thoughts were it was going to be one of the three, Moroccan, Egyptian or Turk/Turkish. At least you are not bitter and twisted about it. I would explain a lot more, have to put my football head on. But if an English girl did the dirty over me,   :'(would I blame the culture she was bought up in? Though like my number female poster (joint with tigress, so far)told me  --- islam is maleness gone nuclear also very similar to my friend I mentioned here recently with estranged Turk husband, he phoned her and said he was coming back, she slept with a knife too.  mysmilie_977

    Raising kids? I will swop you my sulky teenager for three? of yours. kriss kross.  :)She would love America. What swamps do you live near. Not only has she my genetics, she does not have my mother as her mother. No matter how much you fight it, you will wake up one day and become your parents  finmad. She has my rebel streak, it does not matter, she will be always anti-establishment. I think her school teachers lie at parents evening, at scholl she is presentable, speaks when spoken to, shy, no trouble, hard-working and I think well at home she is a fucking terror, bette this way round, will watch out when that flips. When you say your genetics in your kids, you mean his really?

    I will watch Bounce. Please when reading my script take note of five graded comedy moments. (you didn't think you would just be reading it Wink

    1. A smile in the head 'that was clever/witty'
    2. Physical one-syllable chuckle
    3. lengthier version.
    4. out loud
    5. pissing yourself

    You might not get to or want to get to number 5. But in a movie other people laughing can help you laugh. And a movie/drama should have a lot of 1's a few 2/3/4 and hopefully a couple of fives. And I hope when you get to the end, you take note of the technical aspects of the script. By that I mean, read carefully, it would be good if you spot holes.  Afro

    Anyways football beckons, may bump into you tonight, if not cya soon.  cool2

    ETA - I realise that the addition of emoticons maybe incongruous when you have been talking about having knives to protect yourself and your kids. Please excuse my lack of tact. I did not intend to mock/belittle your experiences.
     


    I don't sleep with knives. That would not be good for the children who are hopping around here. I put butter knives (the dull ones), in my door frame overlapping the door so that the door cannot be kicked in without taking out the frame. Not a Turk. There are some aspects of culture that I can blame, and I do, for the damage done to my children, those unwanted parts I do not expose my children to. But the majority of the blame rests with myself for not escaping sooner. For being "the good wife" and putting up with things that my children are still recovering from. I might be bitter, I am not sure, because I haven't had time to figure that out. I have to help my children, and I cannot help my children without helping myself. Probably bitterness would get in the way.

    Instead of switching kids, let's just get your child over here. She can play with my children and teach them proper English, then she will be too busy to sulk! Some anti-establishment would be a good fit for my defiant children.

    If you want me to screen for technical issues, I can. But it will take longer and require some more readings. I like where it's going so far. I have multiple "surprise ending" options in my head, it will be interesting to see where it actually lands.

    Don't worry about giving offense. I just never use emoticons because I am not in the habit. I don't have much opinion about them or their use.

    Don't let Hitler have the street.
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #104 - October 12, 2013, 01:56 AM

    Quote
    Instead of switching kids, let's just get your child over here. She can play with my children and teach them proper English, then she will be too busy to sulk! Some anti-establishment would be a good fit for my defiant children.


    Proper English? you mean English English rather than American English? She would love playing with kids, she wants me to set her up with job experience, I think they call it vocation, volunteer work out of school hours, my acquaintance has a number of nurseries. I also think the fact that she is an only child has some effect. That is why she feels happier with her cousins/friends, anywhere but home.. I don't blame her, my personality came to the fore outside the house too. She is not bad at all, what I wrote earlier was because she had made me rebook a dentist appointment three times.

    Quote
    If you want me to screen for technical issues, I can. But it will take longer and require some more readings. I like where it's going so far. I have multiple "surprise ending" options in my head, it will be interesting to see where it actually lands.[/quote}

    Sorry for not being clear, not screen for technical issues, just that when you get to the end, I think I have an 'original' ending. But please just make a mental note - that you encountered 1,2,3, etc in my laughometer rating. I think I could write it a lot better now.

    Quote
    Don't worry about giving offense. I just never use emoticons because I am not in the habit. I don't have much opinion about them or their use.

     

    Damn my habit of having an opinion on everything.


    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #105 - October 12, 2013, 02:17 AM

    I don't think anyone wants to go to the dentist.

    Don't let Hitler have the street.
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #106 - October 12, 2013, 02:21 AM

    I don't think anyone wants to go to the dentist.


    Lol. Good night 3.

    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #107 - October 12, 2013, 03:19 AM

    Lol. Good night 3.


    Never saw that coming. I imagined it being set up by lots of different people, but not that it would fulfill the foreshadowing and have another twist. 
    My only contact in the movie business, sadly, is a PHD student at Irvine, a distant, not even blood relation, working on his doctorate in film theory or some such. I guess that is actually not the movie business, rather the University business.
    Maybe you should peddle this.

    Don't let Hitler have the street.
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #108 - October 12, 2013, 01:23 PM

    No stress about not having a contact, that was not the point. You say 'maybe' peddle this, so more work. But summing up, you would say 'I can write'? I have realised how you write a strong female character, you write a strong male character and change his name. Instead of a floozy she beds a studmuffin etc done

    There are other scripts I really want to write or a book but doesn't everyone. An Animal Farm but instead of communism, it is Islam.

    Was there enough laugh's. Sometimes it is hard to imagine a slapstick/comedy scene on paper, you need the scene on the screen. If I was the director I know it would be portrayed as I imagine it. Did you notice any plotholes? Anything that did not follow, because towards the end of it even I was skating on thin ice and it is important not to have anybecause that would make it different to other movies in its genre. Not enough fighting/killing for a movie of its genre, hey ho.

    Yesterday you said you had 'multiple endings' in thought, which is weird for me to hear because obviously when I was writing it, there was only one ending.

    So you liked the twist right at the end. The 'movie' twist?

    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #109 - October 12, 2013, 01:27 PM

    Expectations from kids

    I think what hurts most muslim parents in terms of their offsprings denouncement of islam, is the fact of knowing that their kids will not go to mosque, or read the quran, which supposedly brings the parents reward in the hereafter, possibly save them from hellfire.

    I mean you can do everything else, like a parent's wet dream, but that dream dissolves if losing Islam is part of the deal.


    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #110 - October 12, 2013, 02:13 PM

    3

    Regarding - peddling - wouldn't want/get anything from the States. This is a british born and bred type of movie, Ch4 best and other independents that I don't know the name of.

    If I had re-riiten my five minute movie to include Johnny Vegas, the director would have made a good movie because his heart would have been in it and I would have had a credit and I would have linked to youtube by now, instead he made it SHIT.

    If that bitch hadn't given me three strikes I would have written that in an environment of directors/producers, I only got three sessions before the chop. I remember reading their outlines/synopsis, I would give ten times the feedback back.

    If only's and sliding doors. Bane of my life, though I have my principles lol. Either way too early or too late. Never on time.

    When I wrote that movie I was under the influence, no, that is not right, my body's homeostatsis was under hard influences, that part has gone and my soft influences have bought out the writer in me again, I think I could make it ten times better, the dialogue, not necessarily the plot or characters. What you think of my cheesy Bollywood hit?

    When I finished it, the BBC website used to have a send in your scripts/wait for a three month reply, I thought that was too long, seven years later.......

    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #111 - October 12, 2013, 03:41 PM


    earlier I said

    If that bitch hadn't given me three strikes

    well. I'm not bitter. I'm Murphy.
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QPzbkLCbpNM

    only 98 views, my references are getting obscure. Over thirties people in Uk would rememeber. Hmm. If you remember the eighties, you were there.

    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #112 - October 12, 2013, 05:50 PM

    No stress about not having a contact, that was not the point. You say 'maybe' peddle this, so more work. But summing up, you would say 'I can write'? I have realised how you write a strong female character, you write a strong male character and change his name. Instead of a floozy she beds a studmuffin etc done

    There are other scripts I really want to write or a book but doesn't everyone. An Animal Farm but instead of communism, it is Islam.

    Was there enough laugh's. Sometimes it is hard to imagine a slapstick/comedy scene on paper, you need the scene on the screen. If I was the director I know it would be portrayed as I imagine it. Did you notice any plotholes? Anything that did not follow, because towards the end of it even I was skating on thin ice and it is important not to have anybecause that would make it different to other movies in its genre. Not enough fighting/killing for a movie of its genre, hey ho.

    Yesterday you said you had 'multiple endings' in thought, which is weird for me to hear because obviously when I was writing it, there was only one ending.

    So you liked the twist right at the end. The 'movie' twist?



    Your foreshadowing did give rise to bunch of alternate endings. Nearly all of the characters could have been responsible for the kidnapping. If you hadn't shown the victim making that phone call, I would have suspected her. I was certain she was in on it until then. Because of her smiling at her son during their confinement.
    I think you can definitely write.
    I think the only issues I had was the "indistinct" languages portions. If you threw some language in there, it would help, and assist you with setting the mood. So what if some watcher/reader doesn't get it. Remember how incredibly popular Star Wars became among Africans because Jabba was using Swahili or KaSwahili?
    I used "maybe" because I use it too much, and always as part of a suggestion. Where I am from, leaving it out means you are bossy, aggressive.
    There was not enough visual imagery for the scenery, but I suppose that would be more appropriate for a book than a script.
    As far as your comedic measurement, I am the wrong person for that. I rarely laugh at movies. I laugh at the people laughing at the movie, not the movie. I rarely laugh at stand up comedy, either. I think it's funny, but I don't show it. I mostly laugh out loud because of children. So, I do think there is definitely comedy there, but I can't measure it. I always think the little things are funnier. The stuff without even canned laughter, that you almost didn't notice. Like lighting the wrong end of a cigarette, and the expression accompanying the situation.
    I liked the movie twist. It surprised me, and then it seemed right.

    Don't let Hitler have the street.
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #113 - October 12, 2013, 05:52 PM

    Expectations from kids

    I think what hurts most muslim parents in terms of their offsprings denouncement of islam, is the fact of knowing that their kids will not go to mosque, or read the quran, which supposedly brings the parents reward in the hereafter, possibly save them from hellfire.

    I mean you can do everything else, like a parent's wet dream, but that dream dissolves if losing Islam is part of the deal.




    I am sorry. My parents are not Muslim, so I never thought about that aspect of it.

    Don't let Hitler have the street.
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #114 - October 12, 2013, 05:55 PM

    3

    Regarding - peddling - wouldn't want/get anything from the States. This is a british born and bred type of movie, Ch4 best and other independents that I don't know the name of.

    If I had re-riiten my five minute movie to include Johnny Vegas, the director would have made a good movie because his heart would have been in it and I would have had a credit and I would have linked to youtube by now, instead he made it SHIT.

    If that bitch hadn't given me three strikes I would have written that in an environment of directors/producers, I only got three sessions before the chop. I remember reading their outlines/synopsis, I would give ten times the feedback back.

    If only's and sliding doors. Bane of my life, though I have my principles lol. Either way too early or too late. Never on time.

    When I wrote that movie I was under the influence, no, that is not right, my body's homeostatsis was under hard influences, that part has gone and my soft influences have bought out the writer in me again, I think I could make it ten times better, the dialogue, not necessarily the plot or characters. What you think of my cheesy Bollywood hit?

    When I finished it, the BBC website used to have a send in your scripts/wait for a three month reply, I thought that was too long, seven years later.......


    I think it's a solid outline. Do what you need to, so that you are satisfied with it, and then send it in.
    I like your scandalous Bollywood song.
    Can I read it again, if you change it?

    Don't let Hitler have the street.
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #115 - October 12, 2013, 05:57 PM

    earlier I said

    If that bitch hadn't given me three strikes

    well. I'm not bitter. I'm Murphy.
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QPzbkLCbpNM

    only 98 views, my references are getting obscure. Over thirties people in Uk would rememeber. Hmm. If you remember the eighties, you were there.


    Don't worry. I date myself all the time. I am in a time warp.

    Don't let Hitler have the street.
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #116 - October 12, 2013, 11:12 PM

    I am sorry. My parents are not Muslim, so I never thought about that aspect of it.


    Not many people would have taken note of this aspect. Look what you have to be in order to do so

     In your forties, one of the earliest 'pakis' to be born in Cambridge, instilled with backhome cica1965 upbringing, astite enough to know that islam is bollocks (not many in my demographic, especially one that saw the light over twenty years ago

    but still cultural/paki enough to stay at home for twenty years

    see other people die/see parents get old

    learn that prayers/quran of offspring are rewarded to departed parents for their hereafter benefit

    So my mum look at me and knows that the kid she bought up will not be doing any of this. perhaps I should die before?

    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #117 - October 12, 2013, 11:30 PM

    Don't worry. I date myself all the time. I am in a time warp.


    Where are you stuck? With pen and paper still?

    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #118 - October 12, 2013, 11:38 PM

    I think it's a solid outline. Do what you need to, so that you are satisfied with it, and then send it in.


    No, I think I will sit on it and from time to time seek validation off random people on the net (you excepted). because that is enough for me. because I am too lazy, too content. And this is pathetic. But because I know it is pathetic, it is ok for ma to do this. And that is even more pathetic, but then I wouldn't be who I was.

    I don't need/want the money. If someone reading takes a chance and they 'know' people or it is in their field of expertise/interest, tell me what cut you want to get it under production. Anything, even virtual blackmail. I can then write something else.

    I don't need the monet because I have made it twice before, the first time my only vice was clothes/dinners/socialising at every uni bar/canteen other than my own - the second time I made it - I bought a white suit and fur coat and was Huggy for a few years - then I lost it - lived a hand to nose existence - I am too scared of money, that is why I am content with what I have. Too lazy to work, too scared to steal. Thankfully parents are comfortable and so am I.

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    I like your scandalous Bollywood song.


    Scandalous? Lol

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    Can I read it again, if you change it?


    The dialogue will change, my brain has many many more references obtained from having broadband for the last five years.

    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
  • ex-Muslim woman on what it is like to be a Muslim woman
     Reply #119 - October 12, 2013, 11:50 PM

    Your foreshadowing did give rise to bunch of alternate endings. Nearly all of the characters could have been responsible for the kidnapping. If you hadn't shown the victim making that phone call, I would have suspected her. I was certain she was in on it until then. Because of her smiling at her son during their confinement.
    I think you can definitely write.
    I think the only issues I had was the "indistinct" languages portions. If you threw some language in there, it would help, and assist you with setting the mood. So what if some watcher/reader doesn't get it. Remember how incredibly popular Star Wars became among Africans because Jabba was using Swahili or KaSwahili?
    I used "maybe" because I use it too much, and always as part of a suggestion. Where I am from, leaving it out means you are bossy, aggressive.
    There was not enough visual imagery for the scenery, but I suppose that would be more appropriate for a book than a script.
    As far as your comedic measurement, I am the wrong person for that. I rarely laugh at movies. I laugh at the people laughing at the movie, not the movie. I rarely laugh at stand up comedy, either. I think it's funny, but I don't show it. I mostly laugh out loud because of children. So, I do think there is definitely comedy there, but I can't measure it. I always think the little things are funnier. The stuff without even canned laughter, that you almost didn't notice. Like lighting the wrong end of a cigarette, and the expression accompanying the situation.
    I liked the movie twist. It surprised me, and then it seemed right.



    Indeed, you don't have to believe me but earlier thought to mention that perhaps you maybe like one of my sisters who laughs at nothing/nowt/nada, she is famous for it - totally normal person - whereas I laugh at anything lol but at the cinema I am usually stoned, a couple of visits back I saw the trailer for bad Grandpa and everyone was looking round because I was still chuckling as the actual movie started.

    Visual scenery - Correct about book/script

    Pakistani Houses look like Pakistani houses rich ones like rich Pakistani houses and poor ones likewise
    Birmingham UK, not Alabama
    Alum Rock Road - in Birmingham
    Pakistan - look like Pakistan, apart from the people, the flies, the rubbish, the heat and the dust the rest of it is fine.

    So you like it. Good. Thank you for taking the trouble for reading it. Lol I suppose having read my posts, you must have thought his script can't be that bad, hopefully I won't need to lie to him, to spare his feelings <crossed fingers>

    You don't laugh at stand-up comedy/ I would make you laugh, maybe at me and not with me lol but I'd make you laugh.

    What s the difference between light and hard? You can sleep with the light on. (Please don't take this as a representation of my methods of making 3 laugh)

    I am my own worst enemy and best friend, itsa bit of a squeeze in a three-quarter bed, tho. Unhinged!? If I was a dog I would be having kittens, that is unhinged. Footloose n fancy free, forced to fit, fated to fly. One or 2 words, 3 and 3/thirds, looking comely but lonely, till I made them homely.D
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